Let’s Fix Your Novel’s Saggy Middle

Oh, I’ve been there. Languishing in those blasted middle chapters and wondering, but how do I get to that climactic end scene that’s so clear in my mind?

Out, damned mushy middle! – The Bard. Or something along those lines.

Our goal is to get through the center of your novel, and not with a heavy Phew! at the end. But with intention. In a way that keeps readers engaged in your story, and that makes the ending believable and feel earned. Not only will structure give parameters around which story elements go where, but most importantly, it helps you through that dastardly middle where everything tries to go sideways. Or worse, stalls.

We’ve even created a guided worksheet to help you plan your story using the 5 act play, or use this structure as a diagnostic tool for your completed manuscript.

Enter Stage Left: The Classic 5 Act Play

Because I tend to be a more plot-driven writer, I love the 5 act play structure. Using the 5 Act Play can keep you on course, especially when you’re a bit of a planner and a pantser all in one. I’m going to use A Gentleman in Moscow for my example because it’s set up in 5 books within the novel.

Notes before we begin:

  • I’m well aware that this is a character driven novel. The structure still works.
  • There will be spoilers. And honestly, if you haven’t read this book by now what’s the hold up?
  • A Gentleman in Moscow exceeds 100k words.

Because you might be writing your debut, you already know how vital it is to stay between 80 and 100k words. While I’m outlining AGIM, I’m doing the math for a debut novel. The numbers aren’t set in stone, but are very helpful guidelines.

Act One

Set up the story, the primary characters, the setting and time, and the inciting incident (that will be resolved in the final act). This covers about 10% of the story or 10k words.

  • Inciting incident: Count Rostov is given a life sentence of house arrest and imprisoned in the Metropol Hotel – all because of a subversive poem that’s been attributed to him.
  • We meet a few of the staff and hotel guests who will be with him for the ride, most notably Nina. She’s 9, and she shows Rostov the inner workings of the hotel, and also gives him a master key to the place.
  • We get our first glimpse of the hotel antagonist, The Bishop, who grates on Rostov because he’s a terrible waiter. Lolz. What a snob.
  • The stakes are defined – life of death. If Rostov steps one foot outside the hotel, he’ll be shot.

Act Two

The protagonist begins their move toward the conclusion. Yes, already here. Most of the characters (At least 90%) must be introduced by the end of this act. The most significant complications to the narrative are also seeded here. This covers about 30% of the story, or 30k words.

  • We meet Anna Urbanova, the willowy silver screen darling who Rostov tumbles into bed with. But she’s only in town off and on.
  • The antagonist, The Bishop, becomes a greater threat. He’s promoted in the hotel, and begins to actively poke at Rostov, complicating his house arrest.
  • Mishka, a radical old friend of Rostov’s visits and we learn he’s dating a woman named Katerina. Seems benign. It’s absolutely not.
  • Nina, now 13, will be leaving the Metropol Hotel soon. Rostov gets progressively more depressed and decides to take his own life, but his plan is foiled. The reader is reminded of the stakes.

Act Three

Characters are on a path toward the point of no return. The complications of the story escalate, and additional pressures/stakes present themselves. Characters move into place, and situations arise that will help resolve the inciting incident. This is about 20% of the story, or 20k words.

  • Rostov and Anna start seeing each other regularly.
  • Rostov takes a position at the hotel restaurant and helps plan restaurant activities. There, he befriends Osip, who asks Rostov to show him the manners and ways of the noble class. Seems benign. Absolutely is not.
  • Nina, now a woman, visits the hotel and asks Rostov to watch her small daughter, Sofia, for an afternoon. Nina is arrested and never returns. Rostov enlists the hotel staff to help him raise Sofia.
  • When Sofia turns 13, she falls on the stairs and Rostov leaves the hotel to take her to the hospital. Osip helps him get back into the hotel, but the stakes are tested and Rostov is nearly caught.

Act Four

Revelations come forward, secrets get spilled, and something must change for your characters or they must make a very scary decision. The story builds steam, and pressure, for the crisis or inflection point. This is about 35% of the story, or 35k words.

  • Sofia, now 17, has become a world class pianist thanks to her instructor, Viktor.
  • Katerina tells Rostov that Mishka has died. Rostov confides in her that the poem that made him famous, and also landed him on house arrest, was written by Mishka. She gives him Mishka’s final writings – work even more subversive than the OG poem.
  • The Bishop is on a mission to make Rostov’s life a living hell, and they now absolutely hate each other. If The Bishop learns that Rostov has Mishka’s ultra damning work in his possession, he’s done for. Rostov must escape.

Act Five

The Conclusion/Climax/Catastrophe. Characters either die or get married. The hero is going to prevail or not. Either way, the inciting incident must be resolved. It’s the last 5% of the story, or 5k words.

  • Sofia has been invited to Paris to perform a piano recital. Rostov has a letter delivered to Richard, an American in Paris, who had asked him to be a spy decades ago but Rostov refused. Even so, they remained friends.
  • Rostov oversees a dinner at the hotel, and notes the seating arrangement of the high ranking Soviet officials and their power dynamics. He also creates a map and gives it to Sofia before she leaves for Paris.
  • Rostov locks The Bishop in a storage room in the basement the night of Sofia’s recital. Afterward, she uses the map to contact Richard in Paris and gives him the seating arrangement.
  • Inciting incident resolved: Richard floods the hotel’s switchboard, creating a diversion so Rostov can leave the hotel. Viktor dresses identically to Rostov, and creates another diversion at the train station, allowing the Count to escape Moscow.
  • When Rostov arrives to his family’s estate, their mansion has been burned down, but the willowy Anna Urbanova is waiting for him in a nearby tavern.

Instead of wandering the desert (the damned middle) for 40 days and nights, you can start seeding ideas, building pressure, and moving your characters into position for the finale. And thanks to Shakespeare, you now have a rough plan for how to do it.

How to Implement This Strategy

  • You can outline your entire book using this structure and then chip away at your chapters, making sure that each act is doing what it’s meant to do.
    • You can set up loose parameters and pants your way through each act, create a chapter by chapter breakdown, or something in between. Do what works for you while also keeping in service to your book.
  • If you’ve completed a draft, you can go back and section it off by approx word count and see if your sections are doing the work they need to do in each act. Then ask:
    • How can I move what I’ve already written around so it works harder for this story?
    • Which parts are lovely to read but aren’t really pulling their weight narratively?
      • Do they get the axe or can they be reworked to make this story sing?

A word of caution/a diagnostic tool: The percentage/page count is flexible. But if you go too far beyond it, your reader will start to ask: Where is this going? And so…? What’s the point of this? And eventually – Who cares?

Even A Gentleman in Moscow runs longer than these suggestions, and while I love the book, it’s a reason why it’s DNF’d. Readers often cite it as too slow – aka – where the F is this story going?

5 Act play too structured? Bri’s uses thematic story structuring and gives us the full breakdown next week.

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Now is the best time to start evaluating your novel’s structure. And the second best time is during our Writing Community Hour over on The Rogue MFA YouTube channel every other Thursday evening at 4pm PST/ 7pm EST. The full calendar of dates is on our Community page.  Subscribe to get notified, and if you’re interested, please fill out our quick survey so we can expand these in the future with you in mind.

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Before You Die in a Research Rabbit Hole: Historical Fiction Starter Docs

I, too, love historical fiction. And yet it can be a little daunting at the outset. Not only are we writing a whole freakin’ novel, we have the added layer of research. You might only have the items on your writer’s wish list to go off of, or a vague description of your characters or plot. You could start there.

But I’m guessing you’re reading because you’ve done that in the past and quickly found yourself mired in notes and research while muttering, “Where did I put that?”

Grab the comprehensive starter guide and checklist for historical fiction writers, whether you’re writing about the ancient world or the 1900s. Paid subscribers on our Substack get all of the templates and worksheets.

My must-have documents when planning a historical novel

  1. The Primary Sources Document. This usually looks like a bibliography with links. I also make sections in this document with headers to further organize the research I’m doing. The Era, Fashion, Politics, Real People/Historical Figures, Epistolary sources, Books, etc….
    1. You’ll keep track of the title of the article or book, but also give yourself a little blurb that will help you to remember this specific document. Example: The artist’s revolt where they call the mayor all sorts of nasty names.
  2. Character templates. At least for my two primary characters. These are a must if you’re using real people from history, because it will help you to understand them more fully. If you use Scrivener (and if you don’t, we really need to talk) they have a pre-built character sketch and it’s a great starting point. The better you know your people, the easier it will be to find the areas you want to embellish with fiction.
    1. Sub-document: Character Tree. This is vital if you’re trying to keep track of real historical figures. Who’s related? Who’s not? Which family members belong together? Who belongs to which faction? You’ve seen the epic lists of characters in the beginning of books like Wolf Hall, and this is where it comes from. Not only does a character tree help your reader, it also helps you as a writer. Even if all of your characters are fictional, this exercise is still a fantastic way to keep the who’s who of your world organized.
  3. Timeline. Your story is set during a specific time and for a specific duration. Example: Post War Berlin 1945-1947, or the first three years of the Ming Dynasty, or Jazz Age New York City from 1927 until the Crash of ‘29. A timeline doc not only helps you keep the order of events correct, but it also shows you where gaps exist in your story. Perhaps a ton of time passes without much going on in your plot, or there are whole sections of your book that transpire over a weekend. This document can help you decide how to structure your story based on the timeline.
  4. Story Snatches. This includes the initial spark of the story. Was it a documentary you watched, another book you read, or a recurring dream you’ve had since you were a toddler that you absolutely cannot describe other than a past life experience? Asking for a friend. This can include:
    1. Bits of dialogue that’s come to you
    2. A fascinating person from history you want to know more about
    3. An artifact or item from a time period you find yourself drawn to. I particularly love old pocket watches.
    4. Festivals or Rituals
    5. A place you love and feel drawn to
    6. An argument or climactic event happening between your characters
  5. Research Questions I Might Need Help With. This is basically your research to do list, and I suggest starting with your local library. Librarians are the most valuable and underused resource on the planet, and yes, that’s a hill I will die on. This document includes things like:
    1. How do I figure out what women wore in the lower classes during this time period?
    2. What were the social norms then, and what would instantly mark a person as an outsider in this place?
    3. What’s the best way to find images, schematics, or maps that were created in this era?
    4. Anything that you’ve obsessively Googled, and couldn’t find a satisfactory answer to, goes in this document.
      1. Then take your list to the library and thank me later.

Want this broken down in video form? We’ve gotcha covered for that too:

 

Even if you’re partway through a project, it’s still a great time to start curating these docs. And another great time is during our Writing Community Hour over on The Rogue MFA YouTube channel every other Thursday evening at 4pm PST/ 7pm EST. The full calendar of dates is on our Community page.  Subscribe to get notified, and if you’re interested, please fill out our quick survey so we can expand these in the future with you in mind.

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The 5-Minute Set Up That Makes Your Writing Sessions a Million Times More Productive

Today we kick off our first Writing Community Hour over at The Rogue MFA YouTube channel. We gather every other Thursday at 4pm PST/ 7pm EST. The complete schedule is listed on our community page.

Bri put together a great post called 5 Ways to Write When you’re Not Writing, because sometimes you’re motivated, but maybe not necessarily inspired. We can also help you get unstuck. If you want to join, but you don’t know what to do in the hour this graphic can help.

No matter where you’re at, we can’t wait to hang out with you and get some writing done together. Here are a few more ways to approach it.

If You Want to Finish Something

There’s nothing quite like the dopamine rush of checking a box or crossing something off a list.

  • Write a character’s backstory that outlines their internal conflicts, their trauma responses, and why they’re just so darn stubborn/independent/brazen/nihilistic
  • Clean up that one scene that you know isn’t quite working, and that you’ve been avoiding, because you think it’s going to take way more time or work than it actually will
  • Write a list of the worst things that could happen to your characters, followed by a list of scenarios that will bring the worst to life, followed by a list of ways each character might each handle the scenario. (Hello, nascent plot outline)
  • Read the articles you’ve been saving in your “research file” instead of just squirreling them away like a bushy-tailed archivist
  • Write the pivotal emotional moment for your characters that you’ve been avoiding. This could be anger, a confession, declarations of love, grief, etc…

If You Want to Figure Something Out

When things stop being inspiring, or you know that something’s just off, here are some questions you can ask to help get you back on track.

  • Do my characters make choices or do things just happen to them? OR if they’re making choices, do they actually have consequences? If your character didn’t get what they wanted, and would be fine after a nap and a snack, the stakes aren’t high enough. Let them make a decision that could fuck their whole life up.
  • What character could I remove entirely without it impacting the plot? Who’s not earning their keep here, or which characters are doing the same work in the story? Sometimes we run out of steam because we’re writing the same scenario, relationship, or problem with two separate side characters when one would be far more potent. Redundancy can make your work drag.
  • What promise did I make in the first chapter and am I delivering on it? This helps you to identify where your B plot may have taken over to the point where the whole book has shifted. It’ll shed light on where you’ve gone off course in the story, and how to get yourself back on track.
  • What would happen if I cut my favorite scene? Oh, this one’s a heart breaker. Especially when you love it and it’s the most beautiful writing in the whole book. A beautifully written scene that doesn’t belong will run your story off the rails and not in a good way. You can always paste the language into a new doc and use it in a later project, so it’s not gone forever. But the key is to get honest about whether or not it’s serving your story. If not, give it the boot.
  • What feedback do I keep hearing and also keep dismissing? Sometimes it’s not the feedback itself, but the mountain of work required to fix the issues. Once we dig into it, we often find it’s not nearly as hard as we made ourselves believe it would be. Sometimes, we dismiss feedback because it isn’t immediately obvious to us how to fix the issue. You have an hour to brainstorm ideas.

If You Want to Improve Your Writing

Choose one scene where something important happens and:

  • Focus on your character’s interiority. Instead of focusing only on what they do, dig into what they think, feel, and fear in that moment. What connections and conclusions have they drawn? What do they believe, know, or understand that they didn’t before this scene started? Help your readers see the change.
  • Focus on your character’s movement. Sometimes, you’ve created a rich inner world, but the characters themselves feel like they’re floating in space or the conversation reads like talking heads in a room. Get into their movements, mannerisms, and body language that supports or belies their inner state.
  • Ratchet up the sensory details. We understand the world through our senses, and when you add sensory detail to your story, your world and characters feel more real to us. Rely less on sight, and see how you can incorporate smell, sounds, taste, and touch, particularly texture. If you want guidance, grab the free mini course, and use that as your structure for the community writing hour.
  • Sharpen your dialogue. Cut it by 30% and you’ll make it faster, less monologue-y, and it will sound more like real people talking. Let them cut each other off, stammer, change the subject, and tell each other no.

We can’t wait to see you at The Rogue Community Writing Hour!

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